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The pie charts below show units of eletricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The pie charts below show units of eletricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The four provided charts illustrate the information on
units
 of
electricity
production
 by fuel
source
 in
Australia
 and
France
 in two different years, 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, as we can see,
while
 in
Australia
, the
electricity
 was mostly produced by coal throughout 20 years, the
electricity
production
 in
France
 was mainly based on nuclear power in 2000.
Moreover
, the total
production
 in
Autralia
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Australia
 at first was higher but
then
 became
fewer
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less
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 than the total
production
 in
France
.
To begin
 with, it can be clearly seen that, in 1980,
although
 coal was the main
source
 to produce
electricity
 in
Australia
, accounting for 50
units
, the fuel
source
 to produce
electricity
 in
France
 shared the first position with natural gas and coal.
In addition
, during that time,
the
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apply
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electricity
 was less produced by
hydro power
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hydropower
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 and oil, respectively in
France
 and
Australia
. In 2000, the
production
 in
Australia
 was lower than the
production
 in
France
 10
units
 in total. Even though nuclear power became the first
souce
Correct your spelling
source
 to produce
electricity
 in
France
, 126
units
, which was higher over ten times in the comparison with the one in 1980, in
Australia
, coal was still the most used
source
 to produce
electricity
 but the number of
units
 increased significantly, from 50 to 130
units
.
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