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The pie charts below show units of eletricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The pie charts below show units of eletricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The four provided charts illustrate the information on
units
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 of
electricity
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production
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 by fuel
source
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 in
Australia
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 and
France
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 in two different years, 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, as we can see,
while
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 in
Australia
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, the
electricity
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 was mostly produced by coal throughout 20 years, the
electricity
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production
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 in
France
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 was mainly based on nuclear power in 2000.
Moreover
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, the total
production
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 in
Autralia
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Australia
 at first was higher but
then
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 became
fewer
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less
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 than the total
production
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 in
France
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.
To begin
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 with, it can be clearly seen that, in 1980,
although
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 coal was the main
source
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 to produce
electricity
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 in
Australia
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, accounting for 50
units
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, the fuel
source
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 to produce
electricity
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 in
France
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 shared the first position with natural gas and coal.
In addition
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, during that time,
the
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apply
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electricity
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 was less produced by
hydro power
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hydropower
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 and oil, respectively in
France
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 and
Australia
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. In 2000, the
production
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 in
Australia
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 was lower than the
production
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 in
France
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 10
units
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 in total. Even though nuclear power became the first
souce
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source
 to produce
electricity
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 in
France
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, 126
units
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, which was higher over ten times in the comparison with the one in 1980, in
Australia
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, coal was still the most used
source
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 to produce
electricity
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 but the number of
units
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 increased significantly, from 50 to 130
units
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.
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