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Advantages and disadvantages studying in universities.

#universities
It is quite common these days for studying in
universities
 in many countries.
This
 essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of
this
 trend. On the one hand, there are several reasons why studying
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universities
 is beneficial. A common reason is that
universities
 help
student
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students
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personal
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 growth with experiences only in
universities
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 can enjoy activities of clubs skill, learning
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 class with modern facilities and effective teaching methods which will help to
student
 improve
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 and skills to use
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in the future. Another cause, higher education is often synonymous with quality employment.
In other words
, one of the advantages of going to university is that the professions to which it gives access have lower unemployment rates and higher salaries.
On the other hand
, there are a number of disadvantages of studying
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universities
 that people should take into consideration. One obvious drawback is
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 burden about financial during studying
in
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universities
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. Details today tuition fee of
universities
 course very
expensives
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expensive
 and these
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 burden about financial for parents of
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the student
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.
Beside
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 costs of living
also
 is
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 need to solve,
include
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 housing, food, transportation and health care. If
student
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students
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manage
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 to study and work at the same time during their degree or, better yet, if they get a scholarship to cover their expenses during these years. In conclusion, studying
in
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universities
 could bring about certain benefits, but its negative consequences should not be overlooked.
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