You recently booked a part time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Say which part time course you booked Explain why you need to cancel your booking Ask about booking a different course

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Dear administrator, I am writing

this

letter to draw your

immideate

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immediate

attention regularly my

course

cancellation. Myself

zarna

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zurna

Dobariya, I am pursuing

last

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year of physical therapy and I have enrolled in

therapeutic

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a therapeutic

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recreation

course

, which is

part time

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on campus.

On the contrary

, I

have

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became aware yesterday that

this

course

does not provide

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an internship

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internship

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reputed

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hospital

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, I have to find it

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my own,but it will be

daunting

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task for me.

Subsequently

majority

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of hospitals accept

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trainee

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the trainee

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,who has been referred by

college

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the college

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management system.

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there are

less

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chances of

get

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internship

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an internship

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oppertunity

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opportunity

if it is not provided by

institute

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the institute

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. Because of described reasons, I want to cancel my admission

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therapeutic

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the therapeutic

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recreation

course

However

, I have gathered information about many other

post graduate

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diploma courses and I have found food and nutrition management

course

is suitable for me.

Moreover

, there are

myriads

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reasons behind

this

First

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and foremost thing not only students can do

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internship

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with

this

course

, but

also

get

stipend

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simultaneously with work.

Thus

, I want to register

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for

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this

course

instead

therapeutic recreation. Looking forward to hearing from you. U can contact me through email, [email protected] is my mail id. Yours sincerely, Zarna Dobariya

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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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