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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Doctors and
Engineers
 are the types of
professionals
 that the world needs. Every year, lots of new diseases are discovered and populations around the world get sick. The same is the case with
engineers
 as they have different new challenges to deal with on a daily basis. I think that doctors and
engineers
 should be free to work in any place they desire. People who believe that these
professionals
 should work in their countries have some reasons like the fact that doctors especially can communicate better with their patients in the language of the
country
.
Moreover
, many medical universities in some countries are funded by the government,
hence
 the government expects a return on their investments.
Similarly
,
engineers
 are
also
 expected the same
due to
 the fact that they have extensive knowledge of the places where they have lived their whole lives.
Second,
professionals
 leaving the
country
 is not good for the
country
's economy.
Professionals
 should move out of their countries to pursue their dream jobs as they have the full right to do so.
Similarly
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 if a doctor or an engineer is getting a higher salary in another
country
, why not pursue it?
Secondly
, every
country
 has its own short span of training for international graduates followed by
a
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certification,
hence
 upon passing the certification, the professional has full rights. be keen on learning why are
professionals
 leaving the
country
.
Professionals
 should pursue their dream jobs outside of the
country
 if
that is
 what makes them successful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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