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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
Huge
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A huge
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salary
 is much more significant than
work
 satisfaction.
Yes
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,Yes
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 I agree with
this
 thought.Because for
people
 it is
motivation
 The first reason to mention is that many
people
work
 for money.Because
if
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it
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 will be big
salary
people
maybe
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may be
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 better in my profession.They have
motivation
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the motivation
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 to do everything for the good of
yor
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your
work
. To put it
differently
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,differently
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 if you will have a small
salary
 you will only think about the weekend someday and you will not have prospects.
For
example
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,example
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 let
is
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us
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 take
USA
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the USA
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this
country
 have big
salary
 all profession and
this
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this person
these people
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people
 always have
motivation
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the motivation
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 to
work
 well and
comparative
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comparison
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 Russian
federation
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Federation
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 in
this
country
 have
a
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apply
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small
salary
 which impact
for
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apply
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people
which
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who
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life
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live
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 in
this
country
.
People
 in
this
country
 don’t have
motivation
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the motivation
a motivation
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 that good
work
 and good life and
people
this
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in this
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country
 take bribes and it
is very impact
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very impacts
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 on
a
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the
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country
.Everything will get worse in all areas. The second cause to be pointed out is that
many
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in many
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system
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systems
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 in the world if will be big
salary
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salaries
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people
 become happy and will rise
GDP
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their GDP
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.IF
person
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a person
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have
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has
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big
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a big
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salary
 he will
tries
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try
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 his best.To put it
differntlu
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differently
 if will be small
salary
people
 will be angry and do all sorts of
ralies
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rallies
 and can lead
bad
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to bad
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 consequences.
For example
 CIS
country
almost
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is almost
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 poor.Because
people
 have a small
salary
 And
this worker
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These workers
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 will be bad and take
bribe
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bribes
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 and
country
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the country
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 became bad
this
 system
very
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is very
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 bad IN
THIS
 CIS and now Europe
country
 they have
other system
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another system
other systems
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 than
people
 worked for job.Because have a big
salary
 which makes you better. Of
course
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,course
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 these examples may not represent all cases.On balance,
however
,I tend to believe if have
big
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a big
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salary
 you will be better in
this
 job
have
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and have
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motivation
 which
help
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helps
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 you and many
people
 worked for money because it is
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necessary
nessecary
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necessary
 for
people
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  • remuneration
  • financial security
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  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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