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Alternative energy sources that use the natural power of the wind, waves and sun are too expensive and complicated to replace the coal, oil, and gas that we use to power our cities and transport. Agree or disagree?

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There is a school of thought that assumes the
cost
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 of renewable
energy
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 sources is unaffordable for the general public at the same time, it is not easy to change our main sources of
energy
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, which are fossil fuels, used in cities and transportation into natural alternatives. From a general perspective
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mine
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, I agree with
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 idea
due to
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 the high
cost
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 and its
complication
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 to generate. First and foremost, the high
cost
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 to run for a natural source of
energy
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 development is notable. To illustrate, these kinds of alternative
energy
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 take tremendous effort to exploit and generate. In fact, it requires sets of modern technology to take it into
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 which can only be purchased for an amount of money.
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, it is necessary to keep track of it consistently, leading to more monetary
use
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.
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, solar panels need checking and superseding after a short time which encourages a fountain to make it happen in public.
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, the notion of fossil fuel replacement on a larger scale is not available because of the limitation of natural power compared to traditional power. Significantly, the demand for
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 in metropolises is always at a rate; alternatives limited by natural elements seem impossible to replace
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.
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, people can
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 fossil fuels at
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 prices, so
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 is not worth spending more money to
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 extravagant environmentally friendly natural power, which necessitates
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 finance and time to organize. In conclusion, despite the fact that people’s awareness of pollution and its detrimental effects on the environment; it is not realistic to convert fossil fuels to renewable
energy
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 because of its high
cost
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 and demanding requirements to generate.
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Grammar and Sentence Structure
Check for subject-verb agreement and use of appropriate verb tenses.
Content Development
Include a more balanced argument by addressing counterarguments and potential benefits of renewable energy sources.

Your opinion

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