Many people believe that social network websites such as Facebook and Instagram, have had a huge negative impact on both individual and Society. To what extent do you agree?

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day and age, more and more

people

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social

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network

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Facebook

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effect on both a person and

community

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the community

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the negative impact and what is my viewpoint.

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with,

people

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too much time

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the internet

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internet

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. It

lead

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to bad grade for students. When teenagers

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social

media

, they are connected with friends, family, or even

people

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they

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spend lots of time on

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website to communicate with other

people

. It affected their grade. Another reason is that

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human

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using

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social

media

as marketing too. So, sometimes individuals

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things through

Facebook

or Instagram.

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can lead

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they

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need

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to store their personal information like

bank

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account, address, and credit

cars

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details. It

leas

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leads

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cyber crime

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. The hacker will

stealing

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personal information. It can be a negative impact on individuals and

also

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the community.

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, social

media

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

229 words

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addiction
distraction
isolation
anxiety
cyberbullying
narcissism
catfishing
oversharing
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detrimental
depression
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disconnection
excessive
media consumption
authenticity
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misinformation
filter bubble
digital footprint
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Many people believe that social network websites such as Facebook and Instagram, have had a huge negative impact on both individual and Society. To what extent do you agree?

Fully explain your ideas

In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can art tell us about life that science and technology cannot?

The development of toursim contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English become the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

Some people believe that tourism promotes the economy while other argue that tourism destroy the environment. Discuss both views and give your oppinion

The rise of remote work has allowed many employees to work from anywhere in the world. However, this trend also presents some challenges.

Nowadays, many people have to work longer hours, and they feel more stressed out than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their employees' lives easier?