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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

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The two maps illustrate Grange
Park
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 when it first opened in 1920 and a
park
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 in the present. In 1920, Grange
Park
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 had some facilities. Fountain is situated in the centre of the
garden
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, and there is a stage for musicians on the left side of the fountain. In the north area, there were some features,
such
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 as a
rose
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garden
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,
seats
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, and an entrance that faced Arnold Avenue. On the west side, there were a
rose
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garden
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,
seats
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, an entrance that faced Eldon Street, and a glasshouse. On the south and east, there were many
seats
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 and a pond for water plants. Today, the stage for musicians becomes Amphitheatre for concerts. The fountain becomes a
rose
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garden
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 with many
seats
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 around it. The
rose
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 gardens on the north side changed
become
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 a cafe, and the next to it become a big children's play area. The glasshouse now becomes a water feature and it's close to the entrance underground car
park
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.
To sum up
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, Presently, Grange
Park
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 has encountered changes. There are some new facilities
such
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 as Amphitheater, Cafe, Children's play area, water feature, and
Entreance
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entrance
 for
underground
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the underground
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 car
park
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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