The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in particular country.

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in particular country.
This
is a curve graph which describes the trend of the
percentage
of different
age
groups
of movie watchers in a particular country.
According to
the data, the
years
from 1978 to 1988 witnessed a drop in the
percentage
of movie watchers of different ages. of different
age
groups
of
cinema
visitors, which went up gradually until 1998, when there was a levelling out for five
years
. It can be noticed that in 1988, the
percentage
of movie fans from every
age
groups
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different
age
groups
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of
cinema
visitors reached the bottom.
However
on the contrary
, 1978 saw a peak during
this
period.
Besides
, the proportion of
cinema
fans
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different
age
groups
of
cinema
visitors remained
the
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stable from 1998 to 2003. After 2003, the proportion of people over 50
years
old of
age
is different from the
percentage
of other ages, and there is
rising
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number of people over 50
years
old who enjoy watching movies. Meanwhile, fewer and fewer people under 50
years
old of
age
are still interested in going to watch films . Teenagers between 14 - 24
years
old in 1978 were the biggest fan of watching films.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age, groups, years, cinema with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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