The bar chart below shows the proportions of English men and women of different ages who were living alone in 2011. The pie chart compares the numbers of bedrooms in these one-person households.

The bar chart below shows the proportions of English men and women of different ages who were living alone in 2011. The pie chart compares the numbers of bedrooms in these one-person households.
These two charts show the condition of men and
women
living in England alone. The first bar
chart
above gives us the ratio of the English man compared
with
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women
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different ages who live alone.The second
chart
is a pie
chart
which shows the
numbers
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number
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of
bedrooms
in the one man household.
Initially
,
according to
the first
chart
,
it is clear that
the ratio of men and
women
who live alone is almost 1:1
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all ages. What’s more, in the 35-49 age
groups
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, men's
proportion
is about 65%, which is much more than the
proportion
of
women
which is 35%.
Overall
, we can see that the
women
who live alone play a majority concentration between the two gender groups.
Moreover
, we can see in the second
chart
, people who live alone generally live in a 2-bedroom house
according to
the 35.4% statistics number. We can
also
find it is almost the same
proportion
(of 28% and 29%) that people live in houses which have two (28%) or three (29%)
bedrooms
. Compare with other
proportion
of
number
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household, the
proportion
of people who have 4 or more
bedrooms
constitute only 6.7% among all.
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