You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The given line graph the number of people decreased to the
give
the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.There are three different areas.They are the Change the verb form
gives
coast
,the mountains and the Use synonyms
lakes
.
Looking at the graph as a whole, the Use synonyms
proportion
of overseas Use synonyms
viritors
increased in three areas,Correct your spelling
visitors
however
Linking Words
Add a comma
,
lakes
in 2007.
In Use synonyms
deatil
, the Correct your spelling
detail
proportion
of the Use synonyms
coast
Use synonyms
slight
Change the word
slightly
a
Correct article usage
apply
decrease
until 1992,after that sharply increased Wrong verb form
decreased
at
over Change preposition
to
the
70 until 2007. In Correct article usage
apply
adition
,the rate of overseas visitors to the mountains Correct your spelling
addition
steady
Change the word
steadily
a
rise between 1987 and 2007. Correct article usage
apply
Furthemore
,the number of overseas Correct your spelling
Furthermore
visitoes
to the Correct your spelling
visits
lakes
increased Use synonyms
siginificantly
from 1987 to 2002,after that large a drop Correct your spelling
significantly
at
50 in 2007.In 1987,the Change preposition
to
proportion
of visitors to the Use synonyms
lakes
at 10% Use synonyms
however
in 2007 the Linking Words
Use synonyms
lakes
Change noun form
lake's
proportion
was Use synonyms
at
50% so Change preposition
apply
different
Correct article usage
a different
40
% between 1987 and 2007.
As you can see, the Change preposition
of 40
coast
is popular Use synonyms
of
overseas Change preposition
with
visitor
until 1997,Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
then
the Linking Words
lakes
Use synonyms
the
most popular area from 1997 to 2002,Add a missing verb
were the
after
that the Correct word choice
and after
coast
is the most popular.Use synonyms
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coast, lakes, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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