You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The given line graph
give
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gives
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the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.There are three different areas.They are the
coast
,the mountains and the
lakes
. Looking at the graph as a whole, the
proportion
of overseas
viritors
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visitors
increased in three areas,
however
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,
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the number of people decreased to the
lakes
in 2007. In
deatil
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detail
, the
proportion
of the
coast
slight
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slightly
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a
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apply
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decrease
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decreased
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until 1992,after that sharply increased
at
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to
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over
the
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apply
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70 until 2007. In
adition
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addition
,the rate of overseas visitors to the mountains
steady
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steadily
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a
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apply
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rise between 1987 and 2007.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
,the number of overseas
visitoes
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visits
to the
lakes
increased
siginificantly
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significantly
from 1987 to 2002,after that large a drop
at
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to
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50 in 2007.In 1987,the
proportion
of visitors to the
lakes
at 10%
however
in 2007 the
lakes
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lake's
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proportion
was
at
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apply
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50% so
different
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a different
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40
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of 40
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% between 1987 and 2007. As you can see, the
coast
is popular
of
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with
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overseas
visitor
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visitors
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until 1997,
then
the
lakes
the
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were the
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most popular area from 1997 to 2002,
after
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and after
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that the
coast
is the most popular.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coast, lakes, proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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