The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The process illustrates how soft cheese is produced.
Overall
, the process includes four main steps,
such
as mixing, fermentation, evaporation and cooling.
Besides
that, the degree and
hours
are important conditions for making soft cheese.
To begin
with,
the first step is
to mix water and milk into the liquid. After that, the liquid is cooled in the fridge at 5
degrees
for 2
hours
. The next stage is that the liquid is fermented with a little bit of salt in a 35
degrees
environment within 6
hours
. Once collected, the liquid is heated in the evaporation process in 100
degrees
environment for 8
hours
, and
then
the steam lets off. After 8
hours
, the liquid is cooled to 5
degrees
condition within 6
hours
in order to be transformed into thick liquid by using the cooling method. In the end, wastewater and soft cheese are sorted out via a filter.
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