Many countries now have people from different cultures and ethnic groups. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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The present century has witnessed the surprisingly increasing formation of multicultural societies where
people
who belong to a different
culture
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cultures
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,
religion
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and
nation
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stay together.
Although
it has both negative and positive effects on a
country
. There are many reasons why
people
tend to emigrate from one
country
to another. I would discuss some reasons,
along with
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merits and demerits in the upcoming paragraph.
To begin
with some causes of why
people
move from
country
to
country
.
First
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and foremost reason is for
better
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living
standard
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standards
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. Developed nations provide excellent services like health care services, career opportunities and many more to their citizens, so that’s why
people
from undeveloped or developing
countries
shift to
the
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developed nation for
their
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better future.
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nowadays most
of
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the
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children pursue their studies
in
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abroad because of their facilities
such
as
scholarship
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scholarships
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, practical
skill
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and education system which they do not receive in their own
country
and
that is
one of the reasons
people
move to another
country
.
Nevertheless
,
this
demographic trend brings many advantages to raced mixed
countries
.
Firstly
, immigrants
such
as engineers, scholars and other highly skilled professionals create competition
as well as
productivity which
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up
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the
countries’
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economy.
Secondly
,
this
trend promotes different customs and traditions
such
as new languages, food and fashion.
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in
this
way, a small
country
’s
culture
gets an international standard which is very beneficial for
that
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nation to which it belongs.
For example
, Punjabi
culture
is famous in many
countries
because many Punjabi
people
are settled in different
countries
.
Further
, multiculturalism
also
fosters cultural diversity and
hence
people
become open-minded and tolerant.
However
, despite its benefits,
this
situation has some negative consequences. Sometimes different
culture
leads
some
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conflicts between
people
which create disturbance in society and indirectly affect the
country
’s economy.
For example
, in America, where it has still existed
the
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distinction between the White and the Black man
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In conclusion,
although
having lots of merits of multi-cultures but drawbacks should not be ignored. I believe that the government’s control plays a vital role in society’s growth and development. So they have to make sure that equality and justice should be maintained if they want to move smoothly.
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