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Transport delays are a widespread phenomenon in many cities today. What are the causes of this problem, and how could the situation be improved?

#transport #delays #phenomenon #cities #situation
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Increasingly, many
cities
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 around the world are experiencing some traffic problems
as well as
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 transport delays.
As a consequence
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, many
people
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 believe that it is caused by poor infrastructure and others for many
cities
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 are overpopulated. I`ll discuss both
further
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 in
this
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 thesis. To commence, ancient
cities
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 that weren't planned for the future
struggle
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 to solve many problems caused by the lack of structure.
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,
people
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 have wasted many hours in traffic jams.
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,
according to
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 an article written by the New York Times,
people
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 who live near New York spend at least 3 hours driving and 70% have developed mental disorders
such
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 as stress and anxiety. In my opinion, mayors should invest in structural works
such
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 as the expressway, underground subway and bicycle path to try to reduce the number of cars on the streets by at least 50%. Still, any structural benefits should spill over to nearby dormitory towns so their residents can leave their cars in the garage and use public transport or bicycles.
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,
people
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 will be environmentally friendly.
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, the increase in
people
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 moving and immigrating to these
cities
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 is having an
overall
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 impact on the
people
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 who live there.
As a result
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, needs
such
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 as housing rent, job opportunities,
income
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and income
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 rates have become a problem for everyone.
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, BBC Canada brought up some important data on inflation rates that show price increases like 15% more to rent a house, 30% to pay for parking and only
5
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% of salary increase. In my mind, the Federal Government of Canada need to control the entrance of
people
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 coming from the Express Entry immigration process, and
directing
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direct
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 these
people
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for
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to
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cities
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 where are really
needing
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needed
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.
To sum up
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, control of
people
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 and
investiments
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investments
investment
 in infrastructure
are
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is
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 completely important for
balance
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balancing
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people
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 quality's
life
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of life
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.
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