Transport delays are a widespread phenomenon in many cities today. What are the causes of this problem, and how could the situation be improved?

Increasingly, many
cities
around the world are experiencing some traffic problems
as well as
transport delays.
As a consequence
, many
people
believe that it is caused by poor infrastructure and others for many
cities
are overpopulated. I`ll discuss both
further
in
this
thesis. To commence, ancient
cities
that weren't planned for the future
struggle
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to solve many problems caused by the lack of structure.
Consequently
,
people
have wasted many hours in traffic jams.
For example
,
according to
an article written by the New York Times,
people
who live near New York spend at least 3 hours driving and 70% have developed mental disorders
such
as stress and anxiety. In my opinion, mayors should invest in structural works
such
as the expressway, underground subway and bicycle path to try to reduce the number of cars on the streets by at least 50%. Still, any structural benefits should spill over to nearby dormitory towns so their residents can leave their cars in the garage and use public transport or bicycles.
In addition
,
people
will be environmentally friendly.
Moreover
, the increase in
people
moving and immigrating to these
cities
is having an
overall
impact on the
people
who live there.
As a result
, needs
such
as housing rent, job opportunities,
income
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rates have become a problem for everyone.
For example
, BBC Canada brought up some important data on inflation rates that show price increases like 15% more to rent a house, 30% to pay for parking and only
5
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% of salary increase. In my mind, the Federal Government of Canada need to control the entrance of
people
coming from the Express Entry immigration process, and
directing
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these
people
for
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to
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cities
where are really
needing
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needed
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.
To sum up
, control of
people
and
investiments
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investments
investment
in infrastructure
are
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is
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completely important for
balance
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balancing
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people
quality's
life
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of life
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.
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