Q: Every year several languages die out. Some people think that it is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Several
languages
are dying out each year. Some
people
believe that life would be easier
due to
the decrease
of
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language
numbers in the world. These
people
considering
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languages
as a tool for communication. If society eliminates some options, It would be easier to converse
each
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others
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. I believe that
languages
can not be accepted as basic tools. They are much more complicated devices. First and foremost,
languages
do not serve as basic tools. These collective devices contain cultural heritages and memories. They have a sentimental value for the related community. Different
languages
may improve perspective on life, and create unfamiliar ideas which can be useful to develop society.
Moreover
,
languages
can not be thought without their native speakers.
For instance
, without
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the german
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german
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German
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language
,
people
could be struggled to develop
the
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heavy industries, especially cars. German
people
and their
language's have
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a great impact on developing new technologies. Owing to their
language
, several technical terms
placed
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in the literature.
On the other hand
, the extinction of several
languages
can result in losing bonds with other societies. If their
languages
have been stopped
to
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use, their lifestyles would be damaged in the short term. To illustrate, many old
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cultures have been destructed
due to
the extinction of their
languages
.
In contrast
, some
people
think that it is not important to protect old civilizations'
languages
. Because of that plenty of these civilisations have
been
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become
an
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obsolete. From my point of view, protecting civilisations and their
languages
is a responsibility for humankind. In conclusion, some
people
don't care about dying
languages
out
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. They believe that life would be easier with fewer
languages
. In my opinion,
people
should protect all
languages
and cultural
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.
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