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Some thinks newspaper are the best method for reading the news while others think othe media is better. Discuss both sides give your own opinion .

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Some
people
 seem to argue that reading the
newspaper
 is a great way to acquire knowledge about recent national and international issues. At the same
time
, others believe that a better way to get yourself updated is to use other advanced technologies
such
 as television and online update apps.
However
,
i
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 think it is convenient for
people
 to obtain current events information from other
sources
. In
this
 essay,
i
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 will discuss both of these views and support the
later
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 view. First and foremost there is no denying
from
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the fact that
people
 have a habit of reading newspapers.
for example
 ,
people
 who read the
newspaper
 daily in the morning. can't switch themselves to other media because they are habitual and emotionally attached to the act of buying and reading
newspaper
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.
Whereas
,
according to
 some schools of thought, it can be argued that in
this
 modern era ,
people
 should take advantage of different
news
sources
. They are so busy
in
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working and earning money. They don’t have much
time
 and money to spend on newspapers.
That is
 why
this
 way of getting recent
news
 updates is pre-eminent.
In addition
, by using another form of media,
people
 take lots of advantages.
For instance
, on mobile or laptop they can easily search related articles, word meanings and links to related content and more. All these features are
also
 complemented by the ability to select a diversity of
news
sources
. To recapitulate, nowadays
people
 have very busy schedules. they have a lack of
time
due to
this
 other
sources
 of
keep
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 themselves updated
is
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 better rather than spending too much
time
on
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reading a
newspaper
. In the future, I think newspapers will cease and
people
 take all types of
news
 updates from online
sources
.
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