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The picture below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The supplied maps demonstrate the
sceme
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scheme
scene
 of a
museum
 in two different times
such
 as 1998 and 2008.
Overall
, the outline of the
museum
 in 2008 has significantly more facilities
in contrast
 to
old
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the old
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 plan. Turning to the details, in the east and north-east sides of the
museum
 are special and constant rooms for
exhibition
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the exhibition
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for
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of
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the
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both pictures.
However
, basic services
such
 as WC and shop in the
south east
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south-east
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 part
was
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were
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 situated by permanent exhibitions in 2008,
while
 the shop and the bags
located
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were located
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in
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on
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 the
south west
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south-west
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 side of
museum
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the museum
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.
Entrance
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The entrance
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, where you take tickets , is
same
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the same
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 for both
scemes
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schemes
scenes
 of
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the museum
a museum
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museum
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museums
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 in 2008 and 1998. As
it
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apply
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can be seen by the plans the garden hadn't
change
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changed
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a
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apply
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location and
still
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is still
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 in the centre ,
although
 there are fountains and
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a
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cafe nearby
garden
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the garden
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 in 2008. The unpermanent exhibition room
relocated
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was relocated
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in
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to
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 the east of the
museum
 in 2008.
Finally
, a
museum
 plan contains the restaurant
in
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on
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 the
north west
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northwest
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 side in 2008
unlike
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,unlike
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sceme
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scheme
 that was decade before.
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