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Most major cities around the world continue to grow at a phenomenal rate due to the massive increase in population. This has led to a general decline in the quality of life in city areas as the environment becomes more crowded and polluted. Give some reasons why this growth has occurred and suggest some practical solutions to this problem.

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 amount of individuals wanted to live in
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urban
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 rather than
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rural
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due to
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majority
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 of
cities
 in the globe keep going to develop at an alarming percentage because of the
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 augmenting in population.
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which
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there is
decrement
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a decrement
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 in the quality
lifestyle
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of lifestyle
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 in metro
cities
 as the environment is overcrowded
as well as
 polluted. There are several reasons behind the measures to
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 notion and there are some measures to solve
this
 problem. Both causes and solutions will be justified
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To begin
 with, there are many causes by which growth
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 in towns. First and foremost one is , human beings get various opportunities in
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. To be more precise, in
village
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the village
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 people do not get good jobs in their area of Interest
as well as
 they receive less salary. So, they
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 to metropolis
areas
 where they get
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the good
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 package in
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 organization and
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 their dreams. To illustrate, in
India
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 there are many
companies
 in which
large
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 amount of labours are from
village
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 side.
Moreover
, civilization
get
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 good quality of life with ample
of
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facilities.
In other words
, there are numerous
of
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amenities
such
 as
,
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 education, health care, clubs, shopping malls,
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 and many more.
Therefore
,
this
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 all are the reasons
by
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which
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 human beings get attracted to
cities
.
On the other hand
, there
to
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 are some preventive to overcome
this
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issues
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. The most common one is,
government
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 should enforce the rules and regulations for
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companies
. To
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, there are many
Organizations
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organizations
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 who
having
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their
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offices in various metropolis
areas
. That's why,
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the authority
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authority
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authorities
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 should tell them to
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 their offices in
the
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small towns. So the localities get good jobs in their hometown with good salary packages.
For
example
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 many big food
companies
having
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 their branches in rural
areas
. So people get employment
as well as
salary
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a salary
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.
Furthermore
,
government
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the government
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 should provide good public transport facilities.
Therefore
, people use less private transportation in
city
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the city
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 which generates less pollution. To recapitulate,
although
 there are numerous reasons
of
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 overpopulation in
cities
such
 as
,
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apply
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 many job openings and facilities in urban
areas
 .
However
, there are some majors to solve
this
 situation like administration shall apply law and orders authority should
apply
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forapply
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law
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laws
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 and orders on big
companies
 and authorities should give
best
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the best
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 public transportation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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