Some people think that all university student should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

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should learn whatever they like.Others trust that they should only be allowed to learn
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that will be useful in the next modern time,
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people in university themselves choose which
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not have
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they will write off and it is bad do not have
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profession they will a small amount. The second opinion to be pointed out others people think about
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in the future.
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not everyone likes one
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what
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which will learn they will need in the next modern time. Time maybe change. Many
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bad
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for us.Do not have proper
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