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Completing University education is thought by some to be the best way to get a job,on the other other people think developing skills and experience is more important.Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#university #education #job #people #skills
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There is no doubt that graduation is the primary eligibility factor to enter any professional
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 sector. Though some may advocate rightful
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 development or just a college
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 is sufficient to crack the jobs, It's not one over the other. In
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 tend to explore both sides of the argument and support my view on balancing both of them is required to land at greater heights in the current competitive industry.
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, Developing the required skillset is highly essential to conquer greater heights in any
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 market.
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, not upskilling themselves will set them back in their career advances and prevents them from modern premium opportunities. As the proverb says "An Old patient is better than a new Doctor" It's evident that on-ground experience and the
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 practical
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 are extremely important to succeed in the
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 career path.
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 to that, all
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 required by the
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 market cannot be taught by Universities as
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degrees
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 to encompass every concept and
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 required by modern industries.
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, there are no adequate
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degrees
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 out there in Artificial Intelligence to meet the demands created by the technology market in AI
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 universities cannot produce the necessary talent pool in
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 segment. On the Other side of the argument, universities teach essential
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 and core concepts in any domain through their systematic methodologies and proven records. They are the Gateways to prove and convince recruiters about meeting the
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 credentials and core skillset to pursue their roles in the
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 industry. To illustrate, It is essential to acquire basic
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 through
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degrees
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Medicine, Engineering or Architecture before they boost their
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 through practical exposure before becoming specialists in the respective area. To Summarize, to move through career ladders , I am a vehement supporter of enrolling for the
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skill
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 development and exposure to practical knowledge . But not obtaining a relevant
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degree
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 is not an exception to
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 without Experience and
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 or focusing on just
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 development without
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degree
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, may not lead to the
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 growth plan or upto aspiring jobs.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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