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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?

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In
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Cities
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 provide more job and business
oppurtunuties
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opportunities
 to the citizens. Many communities are migrating to
cities
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 in search of a better life, but
city
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 life may be very challenging.
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 case and how
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 problem can be resolved.
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,
Living
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 expense is one of the primary problem
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 by
people
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 who
living
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 in the
city
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. cost of living in
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are
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 higher than the rural areas. Inhabitants in
cities
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 have to pay more
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accomondation
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accommodation
, transport and food.
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, The Vancouver
city
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 average person
spend
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 $1000 to rent
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groceries.
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, Air quality in
cities
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are
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 often poor
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 more traffic and transportation.
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, Compare to the rural areas
crime
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 rates are
signficantly
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significantly
 high in
metropolis
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.
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people's
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are tend
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 to suffer from
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robberies
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 other crimes.
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, there are various steps
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government
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the government
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 should take to tackle
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this problems
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this problem
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.
Authoroties
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Authorities
 invest their money to
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new
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house
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houses
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 and offer more transport in
cities
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 to reduce
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expenses.
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, politicians provide subsidies for
eco-friendly
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vehicle
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vehicles
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as well as
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 encourage
people
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 to use electric cars to reduce
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air pollution.
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UK
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the UK
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government
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 reduce the tax amount on Eco-friendly cars which
encourage
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encourages
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people
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 to use electric cars.
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,
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government
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set
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 more rules and
taking
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 strict action
to
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against
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the
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serious crimes may
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the
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crime
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 rates.
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, taking drugs is one of the serious
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malaysia
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Malaysia
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 and the
Government
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 give the death sentence to
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individuals who
using
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the
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drugs. In conclusion,
Urban
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area
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areas
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people
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facing
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 various problems like air pollution,
crime
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 rates and
also
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 living expenses. governments could certainly implement a range of measures to enhance the quality of life for all
city
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 residents.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Metropolis
  • Rapid urban growth
  • Megacity
  • Urban sprawl
  • Housing affordability
  • Infrastructure development
  • Public transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Pollution
  • Noise pollution
  • Green spaces
  • Job market
  • Social cohesion
  • Community engagement
  • Safety measures
  • Crime prevention
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