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Some people say free time activities for children should be organized by parents. Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #time #activities #children #parents
People
 have different
view
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 about the control of
parents
 over their
children
's free
time
activities
. Some
people
 claim that
parents
 can restrict their
children
's free
time
activities
while
 others believe that
children
 have the right to decide how they spent their free
time
. In
this
essey
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essay
, I will discuss two different
point
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 of
views
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 with reasons and examples. The
people
 who believe that
children
 have to get permission from their mother or father to play
activities
 focus on prevention from immoral situations.
Children
 can be affected by harmful media or culture as they are less trained
their
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 ability which can help to distinguish what is right or wrong.
For instance
, if
children
 lack
of
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the
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care from their
parents
, they might be exposed to
violence
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 videos or get
along with
 bad friends who
boolly
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bully
 other friends.
People
 who claim the importance of the parent's
organisasion
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organisation
 for their
children
 think that they should be controlled their
time
 from their
parents
 in those cases.
On the other hand
, giving
children
 choices which can select
activities
 on their own has more advantages.
To begin
 with,
children
 can learn how to manage their
time
 themselves without pressure. They can recognize how many times are need to relax or to do their tasks themselves and they can find what is interesting. If
children
 are organized their free
time
 from their
parents
, they may
expericence
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experience
 stucked feelings and those feelings interfere with increasing the effectiveness of
time
 management.
That is
 why
children
 should be given the right to choose their free
time
activities
. In conclusion,
while
 some
people
 believe that
parents
sholud
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should
 organize their
children
's
time
 and
activities
due to
enexpected
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unexpected
 adverse situations, it is
more
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essential for
children
 to choose their hobby and manage their rest
time
 themselves to improve their ego.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced development
  • expose children to
  • tailored activities
  • promote discipline
  • foster independence
  • genuine interests
  • free play
  • problem-solving skills
  • emotional well-being
  • unstructured time
  • personal exploration
  • structured activities
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