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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#year #school #university
Nowadays, a
gap
year
 has become normal among
students
 before they go to university. I believe that having a
gap
year
 have pro and cons side and I will discuss it.
To begin
 with, There are some advantages to having a
gap
year
.
Students
 become more ready for what they will face in the future and understand what they really want including what is the subject, which university, or even which country.
Moreover
, The preparation of themselves will be better.
For example
, if they want to get into
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medical school they have more time to convince themselves to take one particular subject, and they will search more about what they want to do. I agree that peace of soul is the important thing. Finishing high school is not easy, sometimes, needs 9 or 10 years to finish it, and the
students
 have a chance to just take a moment to enjoy the time and do what they want to do
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 example, go on vacations.
On the other hand
, a
gap
year
 has disadvantages. Those who do not enter university on
the
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time will feel left behind by others who take it. The person will feel left
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 some
aspect
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such
 as in knowledge and
carrier
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.
While
 the other pursuing their
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, the person still figures out what they want to do.
To sum up
, I strongly agree the
gap
year
 is needed because the
students
 need to know what they are really want to do and interested in because being ready in all aspects is the key to facing the new environment.
Submitted by ieltscuns2022 on

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