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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#year #school #university
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Nowadays, a
gap
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year
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 has become normal among
students
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 before they go to university. I believe that having a
gap
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year
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 have pro and cons side and I will discuss it.
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 with, There are some advantages to having a
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year
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.
Students
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 become more ready for what they will face in the future and understand what they really want including what is the subject, which university, or even which country.
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, The preparation of themselves will be better.
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, if they want to get into
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medical school they have more time to convince themselves to take one particular subject, and they will search more about what they want to do. I agree that peace of soul is the important thing. Finishing high school is not easy, sometimes, needs 9 or 10 years to finish it, and the
students
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 have a chance to just take a moment to enjoy the time and do what they want to do
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 example, go on vacations.
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, a
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year
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 has disadvantages. Those who do not enter university on
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time will feel left behind by others who take it. The person will feel left
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 some
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such
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 as in knowledge and
carrier
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career
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.
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 the other pursuing their
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, the person still figures out what they want to do.
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, I strongly agree the
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year
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 is needed because the
students
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 need to know what they are really want to do and interested in because being ready in all aspects is the key to facing the new environment.
Submitted by ieltscuns2022 on

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The essay lacks proper structure and organization, leading to limited coherence and cohesion. There is a need for a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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The response provides some relevant points but lacks a clear focus and development. The introduction and conclusion are missing or unclear, and the arguments need more specific examples and elaboration.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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