The bar chart compares the proportion of 4 divers transportations usage throughout the commuting to work in one of European city in 3 separate years 1960, 1980 and 2000. The unit is measured in the percentage.

The bar chart compares the proportion of 4 divers transportations usage throughout the commuting to work in one of European city in 3 separate years 1960, 1980 and 2000. The unit is measured in the percentage.
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The chart provides data on the percentage of the use of different types of transport in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
It is clear that
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the proportion of car users increased significantly from 5 per
cent
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in the first
year
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to more than one-third in 2000.The number of people, who prefer to walk to work plummeted roughly from approximately 33 per
cent
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in the
year
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1960 to less than one-tenth of the total in the
last
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year
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. It is obvious that the percentage of bike travellers
also
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decreased during the given period. Probing
further
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, there was a fluctuation in the number of used bikes. The figure grew marginally from about 17 per
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to more than one-fourth of the total in 1980 and
then
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upsurged by almost 10 per
cent
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in the
last
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year
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.
Overall
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, the proportion of citizens who prefer cars surged,
while
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the number of pedestrians fell down.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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