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You want to book a hotel recommended to you for a family holiday at the seaside

#book #hotel #holiday
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
 letter to you because your
accomodation
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accommodation
 was recommended to me for the holidays of my family by one of my near neighbours who
has
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visited your
hotel
 a week ago.
That is
 why
i
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 am
expertingto
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expecting to
 get some information so that
i
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I
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 can book our stay there. He says who has recommended the
hotel
 to me, that a variety of perfect things about your
hotel
,
also
 about the quality of service and price that are offered. I would like to
a
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big
swiming
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swimming
 pool, a very large two rooms that
cen
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can
 comfortable for me, my parents,
grandmother
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my grandmother
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 and two of my brothers and sisters. I am planning to arrange
during
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it during
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 the month weekend and
i
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I
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also
 know that
cost
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 is a little higher
duringthat
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during that
 time.
However
,
while
i
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I
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 am not too much concerned about the price of the
hotel
,
i
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 would
unquestionable
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 be grateful
it
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if you could inform me about the services and
convinience
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convenience
conveniences
such
 as
,
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wifi
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 internet service and airport shuttle service that come with it .
One
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 the other hand we can enjoy
there
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ourselves there
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,
as well as
 the kind of interesting places to visit nearby like museums, malls, and parks. I look forward to hearing from you . Yours faithfully
Mrs.
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Monica
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