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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps provide information about the changes in the
park
 arrangement from 1920 to the present day.
Overall
, apart from the two central entrances and one part of
rose
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the rose
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 garden, everything has
been
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experienced replacement or
transform
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 in the
park
 over the period.
To begin
 with, in 1920, in the middle of the
park
 was situated the fountain, which was superseded by a big rose garden surrounded with seat places.
Following
this
, the stage for musicians, which
sited
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 on the left of the fountain, was transformed and developed into a big
amphitheater
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 for concerts. In 1920, the pond for water plants was located at the right north corner of the
park
, but now water
feature
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at
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 the right south corner. Another significant feature is that the
park
 in 1920 had
considerable
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 amount of green zones,
such
 as three rose gardens and a glasshouse,
while
 the modern
park
 has
less
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 green parts. It should be emphasized that now
park
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the park
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 has a section of entertainment,unlike a
park
 in 1920, on the right side of the
park
 including a cafe and children’s play area.
Moreover
, the
park
 was added with a new entrance from the underground car
park
 on Eldon Street.
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