The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.
The line graph illustrates the data of people travelling by
car
,
bus
or
train
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trains
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each day from 1970 until 2030 in the UK.
Overall
, it clearly seems that
car
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the car
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was the most popular from the beginning until
end
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the end
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.
Although
, people using the
bus
are decreased over time and replaced with
train
. Between 1970 and 1980 any of the types of transport didn’t show
the
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any
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change. After 1980
travelers
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travellers
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by
car
and
train
increased
while
number
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a number
the number
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of
bus
users started to decrease. From 2000 both
car
and
train’s
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train
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data stayed without change at around 7 and 3
million
respectively
while
at that time the index of
bus
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buses
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continued falling. In around 2014
train
users and
bus
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,bus
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users were equal with
average
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an average
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4
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of 4
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million
.
After
this
car
and
train’s
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train
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index rocketed until 2030 with the number of 9 and 5
million
respectively.
Whereas
,
travelers
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travellers
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by
train
decreased slowly and reached 3
million
by the end.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, bus, train, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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