Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Different people have different reactions in times of turmoil and adversity. It is a belief among many that devastating circumstances are meant to occur so they accept their fate as it is

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, some strive to change the circumstances through hard work and dedication.

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essay will aim at discussing both these dissenting views in extensive detail and my opinion

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. When we talk about individuals who give up easily in the face of hardships, what is the first thing that pops up in our minds? A common answer would be that they lack optimism or they believe too much in their fate. Their lack of optimism is the first and foremost thing that prohibits them from achieving their goals. Let's say

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, if a boy is born in a poor household, is he bound to die with the very same fortune? The answer is a big NO because that very boy can turn the tides of his life through perseverance and consistent efforts.

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, with a persistent belief in their fate,

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pessimists will accept anything that comes their way. Quoting the above instance, if the boy focuses solely on the circumstances he is in rather than focusing on how to change them, he is bound to stay that way. Considering the other angle, people who do not give in easily are the ones likely to attain their goals and are capable of executing any task

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assigned to them. It is primarily because they have an abundance of dedication and the sparks to succeed. Having an abundance of dedication equips a person with the mindset of a winner giving him a sense of invincibility.

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, if people like Graham Bell had given up in the face of difficulty, we would have no phones today. the second most significant attribute is having a spark to succeed. It is a belief that if you want to achieve something big, you have to envision yourself attaining that goal. Only and only

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you can succeed in your task. In a nutshell, in my opinion, it can be said that perseverance, consistency and sheer willpower are the ingredients to succeed at anything to everything.

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Task response

The essay effectively addresses the prompt and provides a balanced discussion of both views. The conclusion provides a clear opinion and summarizes the main points well.

Coherence and cohesion

The logical structure is well-maintained throughout the essay, with clear introduction, development, and conclusion. Transitions between ideas are smooth, contributing to the overall coherence of the essay.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

367 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

adversity
resilience
stoicism
contentment
cope
adapt
endure
persevere
settle
ambition
tenacious
determined
resourceful
optimistic
self-improvement
proactive
initiative
transform
overcome
confront

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