The bar chart compares the proportion of 4 divers transportations usage throughout the commuting to work in one of European city in 3 separate years 1960, 1980 and 2000. The unit is measured in the percentage.

The bar chart compares the proportion of 4 divers transportations usage throughout the commuting to work in one of European city in 3 separate years 1960, 1980 and 2000. The unit is measured in the percentage.
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The chart is comparing the percentage of four different
divers
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transportation using Throughout travelling to their jobs in one European city in 3 different years 1960 , 1980 and 2000 , and the percentage is the measurement of the unit.
overall
, travelling by car was the most used transport vehicle in the recent year.
Moreover
,
bus
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buses
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were similar in
usage
in all years, and travelling by bike to work was at its lowest use in the recent century.
To begin
with,using cars to travel was significantly high in percentage at almost 39% in 2000 with
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low
usage
of it in 1960 at slightly above 6%.
In addition
, bikes were the most used transport vehicle in 1960 at approximately 25%
while
using them in 2000 was the lowest
usage
at almost 6%. In regards to the foot as a way to travel to work, people in 1960 were using it the most and that at slightly before 35% , and in the recent decade was at its lowest by approximately 9%.
Besides
that,
bus
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were almost the same in
usage
in 2000 and 1960 at almost 16% and 18% respectively , and using the bus in 1980 was the highest at a little above 25%.
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