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The graphs below display how dangerous waste products are dealt with in the Republic of Korea, Sweden and UK.

The graphs below display how dangerous waste products are dealt with in the Republic of Korea, Sweden and UK.
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The graphs below display how dangerous
waste
products
 are dealt with in the Republic of
Korea
, Sweden and
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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.
Overall
,
every
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every one
each
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 of
this
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these
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 countries dealt with different
products
,
Korea
 and Sweden with recycling, underground and incineration
products
, and
UK
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the UK
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also
 with chemical treatment and dumping at sea. The second most dealt with product in
Korea
 was recycling with almost
two third
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two-third
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 (69%), the most produced was
at
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in
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UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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 with 82%
waste
products
 from the underground.
However
,
UK
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the UK
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 produced
by
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apply
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recycling less
that
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than
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one tenth
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one-tenth
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 of all
waste
product
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products
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 (8%),
compare
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compared
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 to
this
,
Korea
 only produced 22% of underground
products
. The least amount was 2 per cent of incineration and second least was 8%
percent
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per cent
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 of dumping at sea and chemical treatment in the
UK
 Sweden,
compare
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compared
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 to them, produced by underground only 55 per cent
waste
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of waste
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products
,
one fourth
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one-fourth
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 (25%) of recycling
products
, and 20 per cent of incineration
products
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, products, korea, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "display" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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