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The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the country of residence of international
students
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 who lived in
Australia
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 from 1982 to 2000.
Overall
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, the number of
students
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 who came from overseas that lived in
Australia
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 rose moderately in the given period. In 1982, The size of
students
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 from Malaysia was the highest compared to other countries and it remained stable between 1984 and 1992 and
then
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 moved up substantially until the end of 2000.
On the other hand
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, at the beginning of 1982, the learners from Hongkong, Singapore, and Indonesia had not started studying in
Australia
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.
However
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, many
students
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 from these countries started entering
Australia
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 between 1986 to around 1987 and its movement climbed up until 2000. For the
overall
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 period, there was a significant increase in the number of overseas
students
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 specifically those from Indonesia, even though they began to study around 1986 with less than 5000 people, its sizes climbed and reached around 20000 in 2020, and counted the highest compared to other countries.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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