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The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.

The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.
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The given bar chart demonstrates the amount of wasted time in lessons by various school teachers. The supplied chart provides data about different countries
such
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 as
Japan
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 ,
Spain
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,
Iceland
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 and the USA.
Overall
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, it is clear from the bar that any academy type in the United States of America has the biggest number of
hours
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 for teaching. Turning to the details, 600
hours
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 were spent on lessons in the primary school in
Japan
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 ,
while
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Spain
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 and U.S.A. teachers utilized a bit more
hours
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 for
such
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 a basic educational centre. Regarding primary institutes,
Iceland
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 is a country where a primary school did not have even 600
hours
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.
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,
Iceland
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's upper secondary academy has more than 900
hours
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 and which is a little more than
Spain
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's upper secondary academy. Both mentioned countries' upper schools spent
hours
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 outnumbered considerably than
Japan
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's. In
this
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 field , the U.S.A. is the best country with almost 1200
hours
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 . The number of
hours
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 spent on teaching is a little more than 600 and approximately 750
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 in
Japan
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 and
Spain
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 respectively. In
this
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 case ,
Iceland
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's teachers of a lower secondary utilized 600
hours
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,
whereas
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 U.S.A's schools spent noticeably more than 900
hours
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, spain, iceland, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "a little more than" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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