The diagram below shows the process of electricity production. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of electricity production.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figure illustrates two different types of procedures
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electricity is generated by hydroelectric power stations.
Overall
, there are similar steps between a traditional
plant
and a present hydroelectric
plant
which are in a
water
-intake process and the work of a
turbine
machine. In the beginning, for a run-of-river
plant
,
water
in the river flows downhill into a new entrance which a big tube had built for the new
plant
for allowing
water
to the turbines.
The following step is
the
water
flow will get into the
turbine
machines and activate the
turbine
blends.  Regarding the traditional method, one
turbine
in the machine was turned by the
water
flow and the other one worked with generators. Even though the hydroelectric
plant
now is using the same way of
turbine
work, there is an outlet to let some
water
flow back to the river from the
turbine
. In the final process, after the generators work, the power is made by the turbines.
Lastly
, it is sent to conduct electricity by transmission lines at the other station.
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