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‘Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past. This behaviour is now having a negative impact on society.’

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In the past respecting elders was rooted in the belief system of a community and it still remains the same. Respecting
parents
 and other senior members of society teaches
a
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person
 family values and manners. These values are taught since a
person
's childhood and they guide a
person
 in leading a disciplined lifestyle in their adulthood. Through
this
 practice, a
person
 learns to navigate the different types of people they meet in life at different stages.
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, in a
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workplace a senior colleague could carry a rough attitude. But, with an understanding of the concept of respecting senior people in our environment, a
person
 would be able to maintain a respectful work relationship with
this
 colleague. Moving on, why in the current context children do not respect their
parents
 as much as they did in the past? The generation gap could be a main influence on
this
 behaviour. Children nowadays are exposed to many things in society which used to be considered frowned upon by their
parents
. Often, the younger generation assumes they are being misunderstood as to why they are unable to express themselves in the community and how they feel restricted by certain beliefs carried by their
parents
.
This
 could lead to a very negative cycle in a child's life and the
person
 could be isolated by society when they or are
adults
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, unable to carry out relationships with respect.
This
 behaviour could
also
 be carried on with future generations to come. As a generation with access to a vast amount of education and technology, it is our responsibility to understand the differences and handle them in the smart possible way.
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