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Th e maps below show an industriaal area in the ttown of Norbinton, planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Th e maps below show an industriaal area in the ttown of Norbinton, planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given
map
 depicts the changes that are expected to be made in a particular area of industries in the town of Norbinton.
Overall
, it can be seen that all the places will be more residential. We can
also
 see that the town is predicted to be more modernized and less industrial in the future.
Initially
, the empty space located
in
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 the north side of the Farmland across
to
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the
the
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river will be filled by a huge house with a street in front of it that will cross the river.
Moreover
, a playground is projected to be open in the North-East part of the
map
, below the river.
Additionally
, a New school will be constructed
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 the East side of the
map
 where a factory used to be located.
Finally
, Shops and a Medical centre are forecast to be developed in the South part of the
map
, around the roundabout. In summary, it is possible to confirm that
this
 place will be totally replaced by houses and amenities which will bring a more modern landscape to the town of Norbinton.
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