car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. how to do you think this statement is? what measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars.

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The possession of
cars
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is increasing continually in the majority of cities in the world. As
people
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have as many
cars
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, ‘one big traffic jam’ is a big problem in major cities. As far as my opinion is strongly concerned, I totally agree with
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statement.
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, I believe that the mentality problem of
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is bigger than an environmental issue. From my perception, there are three main problems.
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,
people
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own
cars
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for showing off self beyond transportation. Like as much as you own many
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, you are greater or richer than other
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.
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,
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living in Seoul have many
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. On average two families of three own three
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.
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, it can cause a desire for consumption, as we see as many
cars
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on the road and street. Through that public can feel that they are
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a loser or failures without having a car. Because maybe they think, surrounding
people
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are buying a car and
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like the symbol of social status.
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why I
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have got to buy it.
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social media
people
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are jealous of owning a lot of automobiles and under the pressure of an inferiority complex.
According to
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a survey, especially younger
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are planning, to buy a car immediately after getting a first job. In my opinion, the government should control the problems directly. The government can use some financial strategies
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as raising the tax rate of ownership. If someone owned many automobiles, the government should raise his tax rate. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I totally agree with the opinion because I believe, modern society needs to change positively for individuals and
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