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The diagram below shows the water supply in Australia at present and in the future.

The diagram below shows the water supply in Australia at present and in the future.
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The diagram illustrates how the
water
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 supply system changed following the structure in Australia at present and in the
future
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.
Overall
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,
this
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 is little difference between the two graphs. The most significant change is storm and wastewater will be only supplying the
water
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treatment
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 plant
while
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 rivers will be pure and single flowing in the
future
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. In the present year, the only clear source of pure
water
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 delivery is involved storage which is flowed into facilities.
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, wastewater flood is involved by towns to the
water
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treatment
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 plants. After which it is stray towards the river
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 the stormwater is supplying into. In the
future
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, it is predicted two sources of
water
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 supply (dam and
water
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treatment
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 plant) in the map.
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,
water
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treatment
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 is an essential part of the
future
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.
Following
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this
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 will bring the useless
water
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 and stormwater before the delivered clear
water
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 process.
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, rivers will be freedom, and wastewater and stormwater won’t supply

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, future, treatment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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