The table below shows the results of survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the activities, facilities and opening hours.

The table below shows the results of survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the activities, facilities and opening hours.
The table compares and contrasts the rating given by the people to a city sports
club
based on three different categories
such
as
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activities , facilities and opening hours.
Overall
, out of three , two amenities got a good satisfaction ratio from
both
genders.
Whereas
, satisfaction for a range of activities in
club
varied on
both
sexes.
To begin
with, 75% of female members rated the activities in the
club
as very satisfying and average . Meanwhile, 3% reported it was not satisfied .
While
, for ,males 55% of them give it excellent .
Whereas
, 40% rated it average , and 5% thought it very bad .
By contrast
,
club
facilities accounted highly satisfying ratio ,and was 64% and 63% respectively.
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22% and 27% of
both
men and women recorded it as satisfying . But , 24% of
both
sex reported it was bad .
Moreover
, the opening hours of clubs were excellent for 72% of women and 25% for them , it was good .
However
, 3% only rated it as not good.
By contrast
, for the opposite gender , it was 44% for very satisfying , 19% for satisfying and 37% for very bad.
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