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With advancing technology, the development of automated vehicles is becoming reality. In your opinion, what are the advantages and disadvantages of self-driving vehicles?

#technology #development #vehicles #reality
There is no denying fact that the phenomena of advancing technology which they called
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 and investment of automated
vehicles
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due to
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 of folks are in the favor of
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 some of the
people
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further
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same, the first and foremost key benefit is that
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self-driving
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 can cause
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 car crashes.
for
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 now
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there's
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a tesla
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tesla
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 car which
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 an electrical car with
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high modern technology. Another benefit which can strike the minds of
people
 is fuel and biodiversity. During, driving
those kind
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 of cars there
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 any fuel requirements.
instead
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 you can charge at home even no need for going to gas stations. And for sure
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 some
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for
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 environmental protection and climate
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 as well. On its contrasting side,
people
 who held another
view point
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 say that if there
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 electrical issues in a country or a city how do they can charge
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 cars. They believe that
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self driving
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vehicles
 are not a development of automated
vehicles
.
Furthermore
, even it's not suitable to drive
those kind
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 of cars.
To conclude
, I would like to say that,
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 not a majority
to
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drive
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vehicles
.
However
, it will depend upon the mindsets of the
people
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which view they are in favour of driving or not.
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