Over consuming sugar is unhealthy. Some people think that governments should take responsibility to control it. Others think that individuals should take responsibility forsugar intake. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Eating too much sugar may cause some serious

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with health. It is why society wants the law of a country to do something with that.

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, there are people who

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that everyone

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to take care of themselves. I think that individuals have to decide alone what they prefer to eat.

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Government

Goverment

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Government

may decrease the

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possibility

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of having a chance to buy a sugar It would push

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humanity to stop feeding themselves with it so often which would have a good impact on their body.

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, there may come a situation where some people would still keep

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purchasing

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sweets as before as it is delicious and addicting.

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, if someone

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not have

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self-control, they will still do everything just to get that bar of

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chocolate, unless

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sugar is going to be forbidden in every shop they will visit.

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, the human may decide alone about the

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of sweets he eats. If he reduces it, he may see soon enough some

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positive

results of it. Which would be getting

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Moreover

, once he starts to avoid desserts, he tries his best to keep that in mind and choose more nutritious meals.

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, if he sees a snack in a supermarket, he makes his own decision if he is going to get it or

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means that if he takes it, he will have to face the consequences alone, which may give him

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lesson for the future. In conclusion, people may wait for the

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government

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sweets more unavailable around the world, or simply to control their eating habits which is

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better option. As it may learn them to be patient.

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, no power can control your

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appetite

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

sugar intake
overconsumption
government intervention
taxation
educational campaigns
health risks
food labeling
consumer awareness
self-regulation
personal responsibility
dietary choices
public health policy

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Fully explain your ideas

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