the number of people interested in cosmetic surgery is increasing in order to improve their physical appearance. why do people do operations to change their look? do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays cosmetic
surgery
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is a rather controversial topic. Some
people
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think that
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is
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can not be
apreciate
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appreciated
appreciate
in
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modern society ,
while
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others find
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kind of
operations
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a great
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possibility
for improving
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the face's
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features. In my opinion cosmetic
surgery
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is a positive development because it can
increases
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quality
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the quality
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of life and removes the consequences of different unhappy accidents. First of
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it is difficult to decline that some members of modern society can not be satisfied
of
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their life because these ones think that they have
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an unpleasant
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appearance
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. In some
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desired features can improve not only
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their appearance
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but
also
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their feelings about themselves and bring
fullfilled
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fulfilled
life.
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, some
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have expanded
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their
eyes and
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allows them
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themselves with more confidence.
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sometimes cosmetic
surgery
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becomes very
neccesary
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necessary
. Unfortunately, in the modern world, where are a lot of different vehicles and a lot of dangerous
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, scars or other
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unpleasant
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can be got caused by accidents.
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some
people
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have had marks on
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body since birth, which
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attract too
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bad attention. In these
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cosmetic operations can hide all problems and help
people
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make their faces clean and
beutiful
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beautiful
again.
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popular
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to
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scars after different medical operations. In conclusion, I believe that cosmetic
surgery
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is an amazing
achievment
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achievement
of
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humanity
,
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because it gives
people
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chance to be
staisfied
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satisfied
and
also
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help
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helps
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recover
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them recover
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from situations, where their
apperance
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appearance
have damaged.
However
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, I am convinced that it is
also
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very crucial for
people
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to be able to love themselves
with
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despite
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all their disadvantages.
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