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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourism do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?

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Nowadays
tourism
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became
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one of the most prominent parts of every person’s life. Today
people
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 take it as a habit or something usual.
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,
tourism
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 can bring some problems to the countries which were visited by the
people
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. In that essay I am going to talk about which problems can
tourism
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 bring and the ways of avoiding them. One of the main issues that could be brought by the
tourists
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 is the increase in the cost of some ordinary goods.
This
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 is because shops and supermarkets try to make things more expensive for
tourists
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, but they do not think about the
people
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 who live in
this
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country
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. Another essential drawback of
people
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 who travel to foreign countries is that they might pollute the
country
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 which they are visiting.
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 the reason for the recklessness from the side of the travellers and because they do not care about the pollution in other countries. Having said that, there are
also
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 several benefits of
tourism
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. The most important one is about the economics of the visited
country
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. Because if
people
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 are going to travel abroad, they are going to spend a great deal of money there which is really good for the
country
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 and its economy.
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, if a lot of
tourists
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 visit the
country
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 and they
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like it, they are going to suggest to their friends to go to some place which will increase the population of the
country
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.
To conclude
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 I would like to say that I agree that
tourism
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 can cause some problems, but it is
also
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 really beneficial for the
country
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 which is visited by a great number of
tourists
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.

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task response
Ensure that you fully address the prompt and provide a more balanced discussion of the positive and negative effects of tourism.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied and cohesive transition words to improve the overall coherence and cohesion of the essay.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use more precise and appropriate words and phrases to express your ideas.
grammatical range
Work on sentence structure and use a wider range of complex and compound sentences to showcase a variety of grammatical structures.

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