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some people say that professional workers such as doctors, nurse, and teachers, who make greater contribution to the society should be paid more than those people in the field of sports and entertainment. to what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is said that professional
workers
 who make
greater
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contribution
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contributions
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 to the community like
doctors
 and
teachers
 should have more
salary
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salaries
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 compared to
people
 who
work
 in the sports and entertainment field. I completely agree with
this
 statement, and I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs. Professional
workers
 have a great impact on the future of any society.
For example
,
doctors
 protect
from
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the health of
human
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the human
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 body, and
teachers
 bring up the next generation. So their function and
influnence
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influence
is
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 more crucial in comparison with the
people
 whose
work
 in
entertainment
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the entertainment
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 and sports industry.
Moreover
, the
work
 of professional
workers
 is strongly harder than others.
For instance
, if
a
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doctors
 make a mistake, their mistake
killes
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killed
kills
 a human or if
teachers
 do not care about correct training, our youngsters do not have a proper
upbring
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, and they will not able to be
a
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good
member
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members
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 of society in the
not-distant-future
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not-distant future
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.
Therefore
 professional
workers
desrve
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deserve
 more amount of money. In conclusion, I agree that
people
work
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who work
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 in the field of sports and entertainment should receive less money than professional
workers
such
 as
doctors
 and
teachers
 as
the
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they
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people
 who have a greater contribution
on
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the
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society because of their
work
's impact and importance.
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