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In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include and relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the era of advanced technology and science, especially in the field of agriculture, many
people
 still suffer from hunger.
This
 is
due to
 many reasons, like inadequate distribution of
resources
 amongst
people
, corrupt practices, and the rise in global warming. All mentioned above problems will be discussed with their possible solutions.
Firstly
,
disparity
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the disparity
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 of wealth or
resources
 amongst
people
 has caused the rich a strong purchasing power, given their amassed wealth.
While
,
on the other hand
, the middle class or the lower income group have to suffer from fewer
resources
 being available to purchase from their paycheck. In many African countries, where the majority of children die
due to
 hunger is a fact that
resources
 are not distributed equally, despite
African
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Africa
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 being rich in fertile land. A system by the
government
 should be established which should tax the higher income group highly and spend that money on providing subsidized food products to lower income groups.
Secondly
, corrupt practices, especially in developing countries, have led to poor economic growth, and as a
,
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result
government
 has
meagre
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the meagre
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 amount of money to buy food items or
resources
 which are imported from other countries. As a ,result many
people
 are left to feed on a single meal a day. The solution to
this
 problem lies in the laws being implemented properly or new laws must be made to diminish
such
 nefarious activities.
Lastly
, though science and technology have
resulted
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 a rise in crop production, nature has played a part resulting in the form of global warming,
this
 has affected the rainfall pattern annually, decreasing crop production.
For instance
, in Pakistan
due to
 floods in 2022, wheat crops have been destroyed mainly, resulting in
massive
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a massive
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shortage
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shortages
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.
Government
 should focus on building dams and storing water, plus global steps should be taken to reverse the C02 emissions and raise awareness against global warming. In conclusion, the
government
 should realize its duties and implement taxes on high-income groups to make the distribution of wealth more evenly. Corrupt practices should be discouraged,and globally we should all raise awareness against global warming.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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