the chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range of the years 1990 and 2010
the given bar chart illustrates the percentage of British
people
of different age
group
contributing money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010
it's observed that Fix the agreement mistake
groups
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British
people
between the age
range of 36-50 had highest
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the highest
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charity in the year Change preposition
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of
1990. Change preposition
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whereas
others for the same. for both years, age
range 18-25 had Correct article usage
the age
least
contribution.
In 1990, 42% of the 36-50 Change the article
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age
group
in Britain made charitable
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a charitable
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donations
this
is the highest figure on the chart. In contrast
, only around 17% youth
from the 18-25 Change preposition
of youth
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age group
group
contributed to the
welfare work, which was the lowest: Correct article usage
apply
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After
Aftert
two decades both these percentages declined
Significantly to 35% & 7% respectively.
the donations from the 26-35 Correct your spelling
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age
group
also
experienced a decrease in 2010 from 31% to 24%. While
donation participation by people
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age
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the age
group
51-65 is 39% in 2010, which is the highest for the year & 35% which was the second highest two decades back. for people
with
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age
more Add a comma
,age
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than 65
equal
amount of contribution as that of Add an article
an equal
age
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the age
group
35-50, i.e 35% in 2010. however
, it was 30 % for the
1990 Change the article
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by
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age
group
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