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the chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range of the years 1990 and 2010

the chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range of the years 1990 and 2010
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the given bar chart illustrates the percentage of British
people
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 of different
age
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group
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groups
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 contributing money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010 it's observed that
british
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people
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 between the
age
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 range of 36-50 had
highest
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the highest
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 contribution of money
for
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to
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 charity in the year
of
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1990.
whereas
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 others for the same. for both years,
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age
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the age
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 range 18-25 had
least
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the least
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 contribution. In 1990, 42% of the 36-50
age
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group
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 in Britain made
charitable
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a charitable
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donation
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donations
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, and
this
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 is the highest figure on the chart.
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, only around 17%
youth
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 from the 18-25
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age-
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age group
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group
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 contributed to
the
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welfare work, which was the lowest:
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After
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After
 two decades both these percentages declined Significantly to 35% & 7% respectively. the donations from the 26-35
age
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group
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also
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 experienced a decrease in 2010 from 31% to 24%.
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 donation participation by
people
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of
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in
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age
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the age
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group
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 51-65 is 39% in 2010, which is the highest for the year & 35% which was the second highest two decades back. for
people
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with
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age
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,age
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 more
than65
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than 65
 shared
equal
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an equal
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 amount of contribution as that of
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age
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the age
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group
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 35-50, i.e 35% in 2010.
however
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, it was 30 % for
the
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apply
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1990
by
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old
age
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group
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.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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