the chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range of the years 1990 and 2010

the chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range of the years 1990 and 2010
the given bar chart illustrates the percentage of British
people
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contributing money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010 it's observed that
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people
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range of 36-50 had
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contribution of money
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charity in the year
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1990.
whereas
others for the same. for both years,
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range 18-25 had
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contribution. In 1990, 42% of the 36-50
age
group
in Britain made
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donation
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, and
this
is the highest figure on the chart.
In contrast
, only around 17%
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from the 18-25
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group
contributed to
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welfare work, which was the lowest:
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After
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After
two decades both these percentages declined Significantly to 35% & 7% respectively. the donations from the 26-35
age
group
also
experienced a decrease in 2010 from 31% to 24%.
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51-65 is 39% in 2010, which is the highest for the year & 35% which was the second highest two decades back. for
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age
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more
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than 65
shared
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amount of contribution as that of
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35-50, i.e 35% in 2010.
however
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1990
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old
age
group
.
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