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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
#show #household #expenditures #japan #malaysia #year
The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of money spent on
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the household
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household
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households
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 in
Japan
 compare to
Malaysia
 in 2010 in terms of five important categories namely- housing, transport, food, health care,
other
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and other
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 goods and services. In general, it can be seen that Japanese and Malaysian
citizen
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citizens
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 spent the most percentage of their budget on just three household expenses namely housing, food and other goods and services.
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, the payments of these countries spent the least on health care and transport. It can be clearly seen from the chart, in
Malaysia
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 the greatest proportion of expenditure (34%) was on housing,
while
 in
Japan
 housing accounted for just 21% of the total. Followed by in
Japan
 the greatest single expense was other goods and services at 29%, compared with 26% in
Malaysia
.
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, in
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 of
the
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food, the percentage of expenditures for both nations were relatively similar, at 27%
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Malaysia
 and 24% for
japan
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Japan
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. In both countries, the smallest proportion of spending was on health care. In
Malaysia
,
this
 accounted for 3% of the total household expenses,
while
 the figure for transport represented 10%. These figures were exactly doubled in
Japan
 which were 6% and 20% respectively. (197 words)
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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