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Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe that it is good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Although
 it is sometimes thought that it is good to select
friends
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, other
people
 believe that it is vital to have peers who have
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different
mindsets
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 from theirs. In my opinion, I consider that having
friends
 who have different views on some topics can help
people
 to know more about life. On the one hand, some
people
 think that making a similar
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 of
friends
 is useful for them. To commence with, adults with
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 think that it is important to do business with them, and they
also
 think that their business is only growing when all partners have
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 goals.
Moreover
, students think that they can achieve a good
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 in exams if they are making
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friends
 which have
same
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thought
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 of
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. Normally, different sexes of
people
 have
this
 kind of
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.
For example
, a boy and a girl become
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 when they are thinking
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 things.
On the other hand
, it is often believed that it is better to make
friends
 who make
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 your decisions.
In other words
, it is really important for
people
 that someone can trigger them
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 trouble situations as they are taking some wrong decisions.
For instance
, some
friends
 can help
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someone to become a photographer rather than searching for useless jobs because they have a good quality of being a photographer.
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,
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 of
people
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 in the company where
senior
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 can teach
to
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junior
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 and help them to understand more. In conclusion, nowadays, making a friend is
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 really thoughtful process for
people
.
while
people
 may vary in their opinions about choosing between two different personalities of mates, I think that adults who have different thoughts have more beneficial to
people
 in many aspects of life.
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