The diagrams below show the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The diagrams below show the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
The maps depict the development of a coastal
village
named Seaville over the period of 30 years starting in 1980. It is obvious that the
village
underwent a wide range of changes.
Overall
, the expansion of the
village
was accompanied by the introduction of new amenities
such
as a restaurant, club, and golf course. During the period between 1980 and 2010, there were significant changes in both the west and the east of the Seaville
village
. On the one hand, there were only some holiday
cottages
and a hotel located in the west of the
village
in 1980. A marsh emerged beside the
cottages
and there was a woodland in the northwest. 30 years after, the woodland was chopped down to make way for a golf course.
Furthermore
, permanent houses substituted for the holiday
cottages
and the marsh,
while
all the
cottages
were relocated to the east bank of Seaville.
On the other hand
, in the east of the
village
, there used to be just a tea room and the sand dunes along the coast in 1980. Over a 30-year period, a boat club had been erected by the river and there was an appearance of a new main road so as to access the east bank.
Additionally
, retirement villages had been constructed by the main road and the tea room was replaced by a restaurant.
Beside
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Besides
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that
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,that
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a high-rise hotel was
also
built
while
the
village
still preserved the original hotel in the western part.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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