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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans given illustrate the changes in Grange
Park
 when it first opened in 1920 and the same
park
 today.
Overall
, after being renovated, all the buildings and facilities provided by Grange
Park
 will be demolished and replaced with other facilities. In 1920, there was a fountain in the heart of the
garden
 and a stage for musicians next to it, specifically in the West. There were two entrances in the North and South of the
park
, the North
entrance
 is facing Arnold Avenue,
while
 the South
entrance
 is located in front of Eldon Street. Grange
Park
 is bordered by some structures and facilities,
such
 as the
rose
garden
, which was located in the West of the North
entrance
, followed by the pond water plants, the seats, and the glasshouse in a clockwise direction.
Moreover
, there were two seats situated to the East of each main
entrance
, but there was a
rose
garden
 located in the middle of them. In terms of construction in recent conditions, the fountain is replaced by the
rose
 gardens in the heart of the
park
 and it is surrounded by four seats.
Moreover
, the Amphitheatre for concerts replaces the stage for musicians.
On the other hand
, there are a cafe and a children's play area next to the North
entrance
, which are converting the
rose
garden
 and pond water plants. There is a water feature in the Southeast of the
park
 and there is an
entrance
 underground car
park
, which is constructed next to it.
Additionally
, the
rose
garden
 in the North of the
park
 and the two main entrances stay the same.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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