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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrated
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 percentage of Canadian society that used social channels in 2014 and 2015.
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, using one site was the most popular particularly in 2014
although
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 visiting five
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 was the least common. As the chart in 2014 illustrated, there was an upward trend from no
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 to one site and it rose from 22% to 36%.
While
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 we can see a steady fall in the percentage of users as the number of
sites
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 increased. 23 per cent of the community worked on two
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 only 12%,5%, and 2% used respectively on three, four and five.
On the other hand
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, in 2015 we can see fairly the same pattern for utilizing. As 21% of people did not use any
sites
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, about 30% of them applied for one site which is an increase in numbers.
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, there was a decline in utilization as the figures
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such
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 channels raised.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sites with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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